As a preface, I would like to say that I will definitely get to everyone's entries, but it won't all happen today thanks to that whole job thing. But I can't wait to read them all!
Okay, I'm not going to give much back story on this... I'm just going to share it. Here you go!
I was armed with my lemons, and when he asked about them I just said I really like the taste, which is ridiculous. Just because a person likes chocolate doesn’t mean he keeps it near him throughout his entire shift. But Justin nodded along like I was normal. Again, what is normal?
Since I really enjoy making drinks he took all the sweeping and table cleaning duties, and in the few moments customers weren’t lined up in front of the counter we talked about school and classes and going to college and how Austin and Dallas are different.
Dallas is definitely the better city, but he begged to differ. And the final blow came when he asked why I was here then, in Austin, and I had no response. Instead I ran to the bathroom. I actually didn’t need to throw up that time, I just needed space from the lies.
Sometimes I feel squandered by them, as though they are originating outside of me rather than within me. And sometimes I feel like that game at bowling alleys that convinces you to keep dropping in tokens or quarters because that block is sliding back and forth and eventually, for the right person, there are just enough tokens piled up that the block has nowhere left to go and pushes a handful of them over the edge. The lies keep piling up and eventually I just won’t have anywhere left to put them.
Eventually they are all going to come spilling out and I have the sense that the final lie that does the trick is not going to consult me about the time or place it slips out of my mouth.
(Also, because of the whole work thing, I'm posting this late Tuesday instead of Wednesday. Shhhhh don't tell)
9 comments:
Hehe I liked the lines about the lemons. Nice post - I'm now curious as to what the lie is!
I like this...you definitely intrigued me. Now I want to know what happened before and what happens after. I really don't handle only knowing part of the story well! :)
Lemons? Please tell me you prefer chocolate!!!
And isn't it interesting how things can add up in your mind (or your character's) until finally something has to give, and you can't not say anything anymore?
Thanx for sharing this with us!
Hey there! No worries that you posted Tuesday instead of Wednesday. Bloggers can post tomorrow if they want, too. I'm pretty chill. ;)
This has so much mystery to it! I like your writing style, and I'm curious about the lies. The last line, though, is my favorite. Such an honest observation.
Thanks so much for participating in the blog fest!
Carrying lemons? I wonder if they keep something or someone away! And I'm curious about the lie too.
Very interesting style you have here. I like it! I want to hear more about the girl that carries the lemons.
ooo Lemons as weapons! Okay, maybe not but still, that is a good line. There is obviously something she wants/needs to say but can't in this bit. Nice work with the short scene. The main character does seem intriguing and unique, so I'd read more about her.
I loved the line about the piled up lies and I am also curiouse to know at least a few of these lies. Lemons? And why did she throw up earlier? Good Job!!!!
Thanks for all the comments! Y'all are awesome!
The lemons ward off morning sickness, if that gives any clue as to what one of the lies is :) I thought it would be fun to start off the excerpt with that line. This is from my first completed novel, so you might see other excerpts from it around here some time!
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